Comments for Kindergarten Reading Help

Comment on Should I Keep Writing? by princess

princess — Wed, 14 Jul 2010 09:04:47 +0000

Well, the story is interesting, yet, you made Jade, almost sound like Mary Sue (close to be too perfect). However, I feel that if you continue the story, she will no longer be a Mary Sue as the story goes on.
Also, from what I have learned from others with my story, sometimes, having the description is best to save later during the story instead of being mentioned right away. It just ruins the story right away.
I think I would love to continue reading and I do like teen love story. Don’t stop writing and keep being creative. Here’s one advice, no one cares about swearing words in the story and it’s normal. You have the right to write down in your own imagination world. ^^

Comment on Should I Keep Writing? by ToasterP

ToasterP — Wed, 14 Jul 2010 08:50:15 +0000

Hey, that’s catching! Tell us what happens next?

Comment on Should I Keep Writing? by Gracie

Gracie — Wed, 14 Jul 2010 07:57:34 +0000

I’m mega curious on whats gonna happen. Keep writing. There is a lot of work to be done on it, but it’s still really strong.

Comment on Should I Keep Writing? by Nicole

Nicole — Wed, 14 Jul 2010 07:31:22 +0000

This is good.
Keep writing.

Comment on Why Is It When African Americans Acquire Positions Of Power, People Attribute It To Affirmative Action? by VoiceOfR

VoiceOfR — Wed, 14 Jul 2010 06:25:49 +0000

I do not think that Supreme Court Justice Clarence Thomas, Secretary Condoleezza Rice, Judge Janice Rogers Brown, former Secretary of State Collin Powell or former Lt. Michael Steele of Maryland achieved anything through Afffirmative Action.
In fact, oddly enough, one political party did everything in their power to hamper them and/or call them “Uncle and Aunty Toms”.

Comment on Why Is It When African Americans Acquire Positions Of Power, People Attribute It To Affirmative Action? by BIG JD

BIG JD — Wed, 14 Jul 2010 05:10:47 +0000

That’s a great stereotype you have come up with. The best person should be put into a job and if that is how things were done you wouldn’t need the term “affirmative action!” In the case of Obama… He was a better selection of the two running. If the United State can elect a half white/black as president, why do we still have affirmative action? The year is 2009 and there is no room for blacks to think they’re segregated against and people like Jessie Jackson and Al Sharpton are idiots.

Comment on Why Is It When African Americans Acquire Positions Of Power, People Attribute It To Affirmative Action? by Next street over

Next street over — Wed, 14 Jul 2010 04:22:23 +0000

Fear.
People who blame minorities for having success would have to come to terms with their own stupidity and failures in life if they can’t blame it on minorities.

Comment on Should I Keep Writing? by Cheese Bot

Cheese Bot — Wed, 14 Jul 2010 02:29:01 +0000

Yeah,keep writing.It’s good.

Comment on Should I Keep Writing? by Miranda

Miranda — Wed, 14 Jul 2010 00:48:42 +0000

yes i would keep reading.
I am a growing writer myself, and I only have one thing to suggest.
It is kind of cliche, their personalities i mean. The quiet girl, the party girl, the popular girl. And spice up the vocabulary a bit, but it is a good idea so far. I do think you should continue writing.

Comment on Why Is It When African Americans Acquire Positions Of Power, People Attribute It To Affirmative Action? by Lynn Bleu

Lynn Bleu — Tue, 13 Jul 2010 22:09:53 +0000

Obama will be the first affirmative action President. if you can tell me
what experience he has to be president. His color got him the job.