Would You Help Me With My English Letter?
Hello, I am a self-taught English student. I would like to improve my English by learning from the mistakes I’ve made. Thank you all in advance.
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Dear Mrs. XX,
I have received an email from YJ’s PE teacher and I am really surprised.
YJ hasn’t brought her PE strip to her PE9 class 5 times so far.
I am sorry that I feel disappointed with my niece today.
Yet, my love for her won’t change.
She has made up one Friday session (Dec 11) since I talked to her.
She still has to make up 4 classes.
I will remind her of seeing you on Jan 15 and Jan 25 for her make-up PE classes.
YJ has to see Mr. Pxxx as you see his message below.
I hope that someone or you can come with her when seeing Mr. Pxx to help her communicate with him.
I’d appreciate if you could find someone for YJ.
Oh, I told YJ this morning that she has to see you today after school.
Mrs. xx..
YJ leaves her school agenda in her room for months, and I think this is not a good idea for a student like my niece.
I’ve advised her many times to bring it with her when she goes to school, but she leaves it home.
I don’t like to nag her, so I always talk to her nicely.
She seems to highly respect me; however, she sometimes forgets doing things that she has to do at home and the school, which I can’t help her.
I wish I were her mother, so I can lead her to have better and more effective life.
Mrs. xx..
I have been so much passionate about education entire my life since very young age.
I think it is not everything of studying hard in our life.
People often open their eyes to studying at different age.
However I believe that taking our responsibility is very important.
YJ is a lovely and good girl, but I hope that she takes her responsibility seriously as a student.
I never say study to her; if I do that, I probably go crazy.
I love her very much as my niece, which, I think, is the only thing that I can give her during her stay in Canada.
On the other hand, YJ has many good characters.
I have learned such good things from her.
She is very good at reading people’s mind and treating very young children.
She has thought me how to treat kids well.
She loves little children.
I think she will be an excellent kindergarten teacher in the future in Korea if she studies the field.
I gave her a chance to volunteer at a kindergarten near my home.
Christmas is in the corner.
I hope you enjoy wonderful Christmas holidays!
XX
I think you have done an excellent job in teaching yourself English. I have made a few corrections to the grammer in your letter, as follows:
Dear Mrs. XX,
I was surprised to received an email from YJ’s PE teacher.
YJ had neglected to bring her PE strip to her PE9 class 5 times so far.
Although my niece is a wonderfu girl, I regret that I feel disappointed with her today.
She has made up one Friday session (Dec 11) since I talked to her.
She still has to make up 4 classes.
I will remind her to see you on Jan 15 and Jan 25 for her make-up PE classes.
YJ has to see Mr. Pxxx as stated in his message below.
I would greatly appreciate if you or someone else can go with her when seeing Mr. Pxx, to help her to communicate with him.
Also, I told YJ this morning that she has to see you today after school.
Mrs. xx..
YJ leaves her school agenda in her room for months. I’ve advised her many times to bring it with her when she goes to school, but she continues to forget it at home.
I don’t like to nag her, so I try to offer gentle reminders.
She is very respectful of me; however, she sometimes forgets things that she has to do at home and the school, and I can’t always be there to remind her.
I wish I were her mother, so I could be more effective in influencing her behavior.
Mrs. xx..
I am very passionate about education, and have always been.
I don’t believe that studying hard should be everything in a young person’s life.
People often open their eyes to studying at different stages of life.
However I believe that taking responsibility is very important.
YJ is a lovely and good girl, but I hope that she takes her responsibility seriously as a student.
I never try to force her to study; if I did, I would probably go crazy.
I love my niece very much, and I think that is the most important thing that I can give her during her stay in Canada.
On the other hand, YJ has many good characteristics.
I have learned many good things from her.
She is very understanding of others, and very good at caring for young children.
She loves little children, and has taught me how to better relate to them.
I think she will be an excellent future kindergarten teacher in Korea if she studies in that field.
I have provided her an opportunity to volunteer at a kindergarten near my home.
Christmas is around the corner.
I hope you enjoy a wonderful Christmas holidays!
XX
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Dear Mrs. XX,
I have received an email from YJ’s P.E. teacher and I am really surprised,
“YJ hasn’t brought her P.E. strip to her PE9 class 5 times so far,”
I am sorry that I feel disappointed with my niece today.
Yet, my love for her won’t change.
She has made up one Friday session, which was December 11, since I talked to her, but
she still have 5 to make up.
I will remind her of seeing you on Jan 15 and Jan 25 for her make-up P.E. classes.
YJ has to see Mr. Pxxx as you see in his message below,
“I hope that someone or you can come with her when seeing me to help her communicate with me.”
I’d appreciate if you could find someone for YJ.
Oh, and I told YJ this morning that she has to see you today after school.
Mrs. xx..
YJ left her school agenda in her room for months, and I think this is not a good idea for a student like my niece.
I’ve advised her many times to bring it with her when she goes to school, but she leaves it home.
I don’t like to nag her, so I always talk to her nicely.
She seems to highly respect me, however, but she sometimes forget to do things that she has to do at home and school, which I can’t help her.
I wish I was her mother, so I can lead her to have better and more effective life.
Mrs. xx..
I have been so passionate about education entire my life since very young age.
I think it is not everything of studying hard in our life.
People often open their eyes to studying at different age.
However I believe that taking our responsibility is very important.
YJ is a lovely good girl, but I hope that she takes her responsibility seriously as a student.
I never say study to her, though, because if I do that, I probably go crazy.
I love her very much as my niece, which, I think, is the only thing that I can give her during her stay in Canada.
On the other hand, YJ has many good characters.
I have learned so much good things from her.
She is very good at reading people’s mind and treating very young children.
She has thought me how to treat kids well.
She loves little children.
I think she will be an excellent kindergarten teacher in the future in Korea if she studies the field.
I once gave her a chance to be a volunteer at a kindergarten near my home.
Christmas is in the corner.
I hope you enjoy wonderful Christmas holidays.
Sincerely,XX[Align to right margin]
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(The [ ]shows you where to place the text so they would be in the correct format of a letter) Rereading your letter a few times can help you identify mistakes or improve your writing, but I’m just a middle schooler, I may make some mistakes too in the corrections, so review the corrections before you use them.